MY FEATURE LENGTH FILM BLUEPRINT

The basic Hollywood comedy has a budget of minimum $20million. I guess in Australia it would be $6 million tops.

In most cases I don't even think along those lines . I think cheap cheap cheap.

My script will be 90 -100 pages and hopefully the finished product will be 90 minutes tops. It will be tighter an funnier.

My protagonist is usually male, some variation of myself.

In most cases the story is about a guy in a fix trying to get of the fix. Sometimes the situation is usually caused by the protagonist being an idiot in the first place.

For the film to be a success you have to come up with 6 big sight gags or sight gag scenes. A film with a budget of $20 million can have a box office of $150 million with 6 good sight gag scenes.

In some of my scripts there is a MacGuffin, which is chasing something which is unattainable. I say that because some of the scripts are about a scam.

In my scripts you have a beginning and end and what happens in to get to that end can be a pile nonsense. I don't write romantic comedies which need a proper story.

I find a need to write in a few off the wall comedy scenes.

Have some kind of comedy music scene.

I like the idea of wacky cameos from name comedians.

As many one liners as you can think of. 

So we start of with a quest and in that last scene we reach the quest.

That's about it.

Revisiting IT'S BRISBANE TONITE WOW! 2010

It's seven years since we made 

 

IT"S BRISBANE TONITE  WOW! a film made from a script I wrote in 2002. You know the film was a dud when you write a post like this. My film maker mate Scot had read the script years earlier and contacted me in 2010 about making it into a film. We also had this conversation in 2006.

I said "Go for it, you've got my script"
He said that he wanted me to be the lead character
I said to him that I'm more than happy at my current job at M ON MARY apartments and wasn't prepared to risk my job for the film role. The way I saw it, is. that if the film is some kind of success my script won't go unnoticed. In most cases when a film is a success it's the script which gets most of the recognition in the aftermath.
However Scot was relentless and I caved in to his relentlessness begging and guilt trips so that I would play the lead role.

The script is essentially about 6 people being trapped in a community television station during a flash flood. Those characters are the station boss, the Tonite Show host, the producer, the control room expert, a major sponsor and the protagonist who is a film maker only being there to pick up a film he has had there for editing purposes. The Tonite show host has a show to go live to air.  Her guests can't make it in and everybody else can't leave. So she asks the film maker to help her out. He goes from being one guest to all the guests. A role a great comedian like Robin Williams or Peter Sellers would revel in doing. Meanwhile all the guests who cannot make it to the show have turned up at a nearby pub and are watching this man imitating them.

When I originally wrote the script I wrote it without what is called  a first act. I should have done a fifteen minute introduction of the lead character. Instead of being like a three act play I wrote this as a two act script in which the script hit the ground running. Sounded good to me but in reality it's a bit of a wank. It was a big mistake by me.

Scot asked me to do a final draft but I made some weak changes but nothing significant. He then wrote about another ten pages to the script. I didn't object to this but introducing another four characters totally changed the concept of the story, because these four characters being in the studio could have also pretended to be guests. It defeated the purpose of the story.

I became involved in the auditions and I had no issues with the casting and from May to July there were rehearsals. Late August I said to Scot that I feel that when I tell my boss that I will need some time off for filming that she will sack me so I should stand down and he should find another person for the lead. She was having a sackathon at the time. He said that would be wrong and that without me the project would not get off the ground. I notified my boss about this on August 16 and was sacked on September 5th for a variety of unrelated items. None worthy of sacking at all. Things I didn't do on Tuesday but did on Wednesday type of things. All were so minor it was ridiculous. It was like she had a dossier on every mistake I had made and everyone else for that matter.  Just on this point, this boss had taken over at the start of year. She sacked me in April for a story she invented, re-employed me when some workers called her a liar and in the time I worked there had sacked all the seventeen of her staff that she had when she became boss. Bottom line, she loved sacking people. Loved it.

Scot had a plan to start shooting in late September and finish in early December, We only filmed scenes on the weekend between 8am and 3pm (and I worked on the weekends) The camera man had to leave for another job at 3pm so that's why shooting finished at 3pm.  If we had shot to 6pm on Saturdays and 4pm on Sundays we would have completed the filming in a month.As an actor I was a slow starter but was usually getting into my role in the early afternoon.
Scot proved to be a well organised producer and a competent director but the early finishes didn't do the film or anyone else any justice. At 3pm it was like we all felt let's knock over another scene or two but this never happened and the reality is that when you read this script, which basically has 80% of it at only two locations could be done very quickly.


We had one major disagreement on the set. I was playing a man who was pretending to be six other characters. Scot wanted one actor to play a dual role which I thought was confusing but more so unnecessary. I told Scot so and when this actor came in for the second role I was very pissed off.
The reality is this guy's second character was not so obvious so maybe I was wrong but it was unnecessary and the bloke actually flew back from Perth especially to play the lesser role , because his scenes were shot early in the production.

Now here's where the real problems start. The film was shot in a 3 major locations. A shop in Wooloongabba, a studio in Annerley built by Scot and a hotel in the city on a night where there major construction being performed.  All locations had such major sound issues the final print was unwatchable.

Scot deleted twelve laugh lines from his final edit. Everyone was unhappy about this and Scot said that Ricky Gervais didn't use laugh lines in THE OFFICE. Actually Scot misunderstood what Gervais was getting at, but what Gervais was saying is he didn't write characters in the ABSOLUTELY FABULOUS vein who enter a room and say some deliberately outrageous to get a laugh.  He later admitted this was a mistake but the footage was discarded by this point, never to be retrieved. Twelve laugh lines is an enormous amount, most comedy films don't have twelve laugh lines.

The final product had minimal music and we are talking about a light comedy here, so I insisted on more music This may sound strange but I believe the music is what sets apart a good film from great film and some music can kill a good film. Try watching the original CASINO ROYALE. After the great opening theme Burt Bacharach he had no idea how to score a movie. I've always said that Jerry Goldsmith could turn an ordinary film into what appears to be a very good film on the strength of  his great music. BASIC INSTINCT being the perfect example. 

 Scot finally came clean and said he had no interest in a music score as there was none in THE OFFICE or FAWLTY TOWERS. ( True) I'll say this, presuming we all love FAWLTY TOWERS, we'd love it a hell of a lot more if it had a music score. If I knew that he didn't believe in musical scores for movies I would have said "Why bother making films then?"

THE FINAL PRODUCT
Terrible sound killed it. I suggested to Scot before shooting that we should approach Briz 31 for the hiring of their studios. He said "NO" in a heartbeat,  and yet a quote from Briz 31 would have been useful and they weren't expensive.

Little music made that situation worse. It needed a bouncy feel through it. It wasn't a drama nor was it THE OFFICE.

The Actors
Everyone who performed in the film was really good. Especially Sonia who played the equal lead role. Honestly, I was the weak link in the acting stakes.  And I was now out of work so the whole thing didn't sit well with me.

My performance was ordinary and unfortunately all my best stuff was shot in the mid afternoon.

Editing
The editing was mediocre. Too many scenes of people especially me, walking from A to B. I did my own edit cutting ten minutes from Scot's Final product which made big difference. I cut one scene but also cut every entry and exit from a scene to a minimum.You don't need to see people leaving a room if it's unnecessary.


My script was 6/10
I should have written two introduction scenes for the lead character taking a minimum of ten minutes.
That was biggest the second biggest mistake.
My character should have been a bumbling idiot with some minor but effective sight gags added. I should have written what I know and that was my biggest mistake.  This is the biggest mistake with modern comedy. He should have been a klutz.

I had  a scene at the start with  mechanic. I needed to have this mechanic contact  the lead character a few times through the film to build up a tense situation, because they meet at the end it would have been very funny if there was more interaction during the film. ( It's also very Larry David)

Strangely Scot changed the title to IT"S BRISBANE TONIGHT WOW! using proper English for TONITE.

Would I do it all again? Having highlighted the issues I know another shot at this would work.

A rewrite of the script would improve it dramatically.
Scot's direction showed it was a good watchable story.
Needs a suitable light musical score. (BUT No guitars).

THE WRITING OF PONDEROSA

 I've almost finished writing the best comedy film script I've ever written PONDEROSA.

First of all BONANZA is one of my very favourite shows of all time. Top 5.  I watch it now on Foxtel at least few times a week. Back in the 90's it was on Channel 9 at midnight and I finished work at 11pm so I'd watch it before going to bed. I'd go into work the next day and I had a running joke with my work mate Terry Keir.
It went this way.
Did you watch Bonanza last night?
Yes.
And what was the lesson?
DON"T FUCK WITH THE CARTWRIGHT'S.


Six years ago I started writing PONDEROSA a comedy tribute and feature length send up of BONANZA and it's now near completion. I have many excuses for why it has taken so long but over that time I had written 30 pages of notes and had many visions in my head of what was going to happen.
At the same time I was writing another script which has still gone nowhere.
So I've just had some time off work and almost completed PONDEROSA and it's looking good.
So what is PONDEROSA and what is not PONEDROSA.


IT'S NOT
It's not a Zucker Abrahams Scary Movie type. ( Apologies to the Zuckers because they created a comedy genre that has been abused so that films in their style are now ridiculous, or shithouse or both).

So it's not a western in which characters use mobile phones and computers carry automatic weapons and have many irrelevant things going on in the background and foreground. The are no scenes with 10 pointless gags per minute.

IT'S NOT
A gross out western, so that although there's plenty of killings and accidents the injuries aren't highlighted for "laughs".

IT'S NOT
Full of swearing and "cuss words" because I want the biggest audience possible if possible, but there's plenty of sexual innuendo which Is what I use to instead.


IT'S NOT
A lame likable frolic, it's full of comedy. It's fucking comedy.

IT IS Not at all like BLAZING SADDLES in a comedy sense.

IT IS Like BLAZING SADDLES in a style and budget sense. I'm writing a big picture .

IT IS
A big budget big scale western. I can picture  a few actors as Ben Cartwright as Ben is hilarious, so Will Ferrell would be my first choice, but there are a few others who would fit. 

IT IS
FUNNY for every minute and seldom lets up. I had to write comedy comedy comedy at the top of each page.

IT IS
A film with a paper thin plot and surrounding that plot are many big scenes or big sketches, so in that sense it resembles the MONTY PYTHON films.

IT IS
 A film with send ups of other westerns such as Brokeback Mountain, but it's not Zucker like so not every scene is a send up. I've been very selective and as an avid BONANZA and THE VIRGINIAN viewer.  I've chosen to tweak scenes from those shows rather than look for film send ups.

IT IS
A film with big scale sight gags  but is heavy on verbal jokes.

That's it for now as it's still not completed but getting close.

Note: 2022 and it is complete.

FILM REVIEWS :CAT BALLOU & THE GOOD GUYS and the BAD GUYS

Two films I've watched recently. Both Comedy westerns

CAT BALLOU   1965 

IMDB RATING 6.9

AFI Funniest 100 films Rating Number 50

Starring  : Jane Fonda and Lee Marvin

Directed by : Eliot Silverstein

Screenplay  : Walter Newman and Frank R Pierson

Based on a novel by  : Ray Chanslor


THE GOOD GUYS & THE BAD GUYS 1969 
Robert Mitchum and George Kennedy & Tina Louise

IMDB RATING
6.2

Directed by Burt Kennedy

Screenplay
Ronald M Cohen and Dennis Shryack


Cat Ballou was huge hit and The Good Guys and the Bad Guys not so.
These two films are lightweight comedy westerns, but the word lightweight is more appropriate than comedy.
Sure lots of mildly amusing things happen, like in Cat Ballou there's a guy who fires his gun and from 20 metres away misses a barn and in The Good Guys and the Bad Guys there are people chasing a runaway train in cars and on horses.

The banter is cute and snappy and the actors are all smiling and having a great time so there's some entertainment value.........but mainly for them.

CAT BALLOU made NO 50 in the AFI top 100 comedies of all time and this is beyond  my comprehension. There has to be a criteria and it just doesn't make the criteria. The criteria has to include funny and it's not funny it's mildly humourous.

I can watch Jane Fonda in anything and Tina Louise is so drop dead gorgeous in The Good Guys and the Bad Guys it makes me wonder why she didn't get more work. Seriously.

But there is a bottom line here and the bottom line here is there are no funny lines, no laughs, especially no belly laughs and the stark reality is that without funny lines, it aint comedy.

I'LL BE SEEING YOU GARRY SHANDLING

Late one night in the late 80's I was sitting up as usual and this new show came on Channel 9. Called It's Garry Shandling Show I watched and thought this is a very funny guy and the most refreshing show I'd ever seen.

As a night shift worker the show and Garry became a part of my life. As they are saying now he broke the fourth wall by talking to the audience but that was just one of many devices he used. It wasn't the devices which won me over it was his comedy, his ability to twist a sentence and turn everything on it's head.

The show was very inventive and very funny.  In American terms it was low budget and that always works for me.

Then Garry disappeared off our screens for a few years and then I heard of The Larry Sanders Show.
I watched the first episode and admittedly didn't know what he was doing. I thought this is pretty full on. I'm not afraid to admit that it was way ahead of anything I'd dreamed of , but by the third episode I totally got it and once I got it I was like it's biggest fan.

I don't intend to go into detail suffice to say I think it's the best sitcom ever.

I think the last episode is as good as the last episode of CHEERS and THE MARY TYLER MOORE SHOW.

Since it finished I've missed Garry and occasionally seen him as a guest on a tonight Show.

When I did stand up comedy I wrote many routines and lines in the "Shandling" style.

Only this week I became aware that his feature film WHAT PLANET ARE YOU FROM was an enormous flop. Budget $50 million with world wide returns of  $7 million. I know at the time I liked it and thought it was very funny and I guess I was allowed to enjoy it. Sure the whirring penis angle was uncomfortable at some stages but sometimes it was funny. Well he made it funny.

Who knows what caused his death. I saw him on Letterman and thought he looked very unwell.
I was like a little kid when I saw him in IRON MAN 2. There's Garry There's Garry.

On a purely selfish level I miss that I will never get to meet him, well not yet anyway.

There's very few major new comedy influences around now , especially Louis CK  with  Larry David, Seth McFarlane and Steven Levitan but there's not much on the horizon.
I miss you Garry and I will always love you and your comedy, you are one of my greatest influences.

60's &70's comedies and their WRITERS.

The sitcom is my favourite genre of comedy.
Makes sense, because as a kid you grow up with sitcoms.
I didn't  grow up with too many sketch comedies, there were a few but sitcoms were on every day of the week , whereas sketch comedies were on for 6 weeks and then disappeared until the next year. Also, they were more for the adults.  Also you couldn't see a new release film in my era, you had to wait a few years for television release. As one of the greatest Woody Allen fans the first Woody Allen film I saw was BANANAS late one night on Channel Ten in 1977, and as a kid I only saw stand up comics doing bits on TV specials.

But sitcoms, they were comedies kids could watch.

Why doesn't Australia have great sitcoms.
Answer: You need great comedy writers and the reality is that great sitcom comedy writers are not easy to find.
 Here is a list of some of my favourite comedies. ( in Chronological order) and on the right side are writers who had major involvement in these shows

ROCKY & BULLWINKLE      Chris Hayward  Allan Burns
THE MUNSTERS      Chris Hayward, Allan Burns
GET SMART   Chris Hayward Allan Burns Arne Sultan
MARY TYLER MOORE SHOW  Allan Burns
BARNEY MILLER   Chris Hayward  Arne Sultan

Or
McHALES NAVY  Laurence Marks
F TROOP  Laurence Marks   Arthur Julian
HOGANS HEROES  Laurence Marks   Arthur Julian
MASH Laurence Marks ( Larry Gelbart)

Hollingsworth Morse was a director on all these  "service" shows.

For the record I don't find Hogan's Heroes at all funny. Love Bob Crane but it's a drama with dubbed laughter.

I've just mentioned 8 of the most popular and best sitcoms of all time plus Rocky and Bullwinkle.

Although many writers collaborated on these show it's my belief that there are very few great sitcom writers and this list shows the strong influence of the great writers of this period.
The same thing is happening now with American sitcom.
More on the 70's through to now later.

For the record  and we all love lists.GET SMART, THE MARY TYLER MOORE SHOW  & BARNEY MILLER all would be in my top ten comedies of all time. MASH would miss out because I just didn't find it funny after Henry Blake and Trapper left. It became a drama with Hawkeye Pierce.

ALL IN THE FAMILY had a different set of writers and is in my top ten. I'd lose credibility if not mentioning it and including it in my top ten.

MORE SITCOM THOUGHTS

My favourite genre of comedy is the sitcom. I think that applies to about 95% of people.
Sure we can love paying $200 to see Robin Williams or Billy Connolly. (Once in a life time experience)
Sure we love going to the flicks to see a good comedy movie and it rarely happens. ( Most comedy movies stink)
Sure we get big belly laughs from the great comedy sketches of great sketch comedians. (But we can't watch them over and over again)
But sitcoms are like our best friends.

I don't like defining sitcom. I consider half hour comedy shows in which we get to know the characters as sitcoms. So GET SMART to me is a sitcom. (yer it's satire but it's the format)

Australia doesn't do good sitcoms and there's a simple reason why.
But I digress. I've come up with a great sitcom idea and think it could be a success but here's what it needs.

For the purpose of this article I'll call it AUSSIE FAMILY (that's not the title)
AUSSIE FAMILY if gone through the procedure of every other Aussies comedy will fail no matter how good I think it's potential is.

So back to the heading.
HOW TO MAKE A SUCCESSFUL AUSSIE SITCOM?

1. Take all the key elements from the best U.S comedies. Not the British. The British don't seem how to nail a punchline.

2 Get all the best comedy writers in Australia on board. Have 20-30 writers if need be.
Australian comedies fail because of our "closed shop" mentality. We are too protective, which means scared of our project being shared.

3 Get an American from a successful sitcom to be the script editor or supervisor.

4 Forget about creating characters as such , create funny lines of a certain style for each character. Then their characters will evolve from the their lines. Look at Carla in CHEERS she evolved from just being a wise cracker.

5 Every character must have an angle no matter how small. The perfect example is Larry in NEWHART. 

 6 The characters all live in the now, the past is not part of the sitcom world.
e.g CHEERS Sam had a brother. His appearance in one episode was the extent of his involvement. Never mentioned before, never mentioned after. Same with Ted Baxter in Mary Tyler Moore Show.

GUEST STARS
Not a big thing in U.S sitcoms but for Australian sitcoms it's necessary.

That's most of my ingredients for an Aussie Sitcom.